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May's drabble

May 22nd, 2010 (10:21 am)

This time my drabble came third at dmhgchallenge. (I was pleased, because there were some particularly good entries this time :-)


The prompt was

Author: Ningloreth
Title: Star-crossed
Rating: R
Warnings: None

Ron, rooted to the couch, mumbles a sullen Hello.

Hermione sinks wearily into a chair, and closes her eyes.

She thinks of Draco Malfoy, greeting his fiancée with a peck on the cheek, one elegant hand hovering at her waist.

(It’s not love, she thinks, it’s possession—he’s showing the world that Astoria’s his).

He’d glanced at her then, and caught her staring, but—instead of the sneer she’d expected—his lingering gaze had held an invitation: You and me, Granger—how about it?

His arrogance had amazed her.


But now—tonight, with Ron—she’s wishing she’d said yes.


This was inspired by something I saw when travelling on the tram into Manchester -- a boy on his way to school, surrounded by his own bunch of Goyles and Crabbes and, when his girlfriend got on (she was one of those impeccably turned-out trophy fourteen year olds), he put his hand to her waist, pulled her close, and gave her a proprietorial peck on the cheek, and I thought: That's so Draco! Then I had to find a way of making it work with the prompt...


Posted by: starduchess (starduchess)
Posted at: May 22nd, 2010 01:20 pm (UTC)

This was excellent and I definitely voted for it! It works with canon and still manages to be D/Hr.

Interesting how the story came about. Trophy wife indeed. Funny thing is his mum, Narcissa, is too.

I really loved Hermione acknowledging that Ron wasn't what she truly wanted. It's unfortunate that she never will (at least, not here).

Spectacular use of the prompt. :)

Posted by: ningloreth (ningloreth)
Posted at: May 22nd, 2010 07:23 pm (UTC)

Thank you!

Funny thing is his mum, Narcissa, is too.

I'm sure that's the sort of thing that passes from father to son, especially when your family's magical 'royalty'. And I shouldn't think either Malfoy would have any qualms about seeking a bit of extra excitement elsewhere :-)

Poor Hermione, though, is too moral.

Posted by: curiouswombat (curiouswombat)
Posted at: May 22nd, 2010 10:14 pm (UTC)
Oh Dear

Poor Ron - he just isn't very exciting, is he?

Posted by: ningloreth (ningloreth)
Posted at: May 22nd, 2010 10:40 pm (UTC)

And in this corner of the fandom in particular!

Posted by: leopion (leopion)
Posted at: May 23rd, 2010 01:09 am (UTC)

Poor Hermione! She should definitely have said yes. All in all, great drabble! ♥

Posted by: ningloreth (ningloreth)
Posted at: May 23rd, 2010 01:16 pm (UTC)

Thank you!

She should definitely have said yes.

I very much doubt that Draco will give up so, who knows, she may next time!

Posted by: elektra30 (elektra30)
Posted at: May 24th, 2010 02:07 pm (UTC)

Just popping by to say that I liked this very much and voted for it (: It's like they're both putting on acts and masks; particularly liked the sentence where Hermione sees through his little gesture as a showy possessiveness rather than love. And using that RL inspiration was spot-on! (:

Posted by: ningloreth (ningloreth)
Posted at: May 26th, 2010 01:22 am (UTC)

Thank you :-)

It's rather more angsty than I usually write D/Hr, but I liked the idea of them each fancying the other like mad (though Draco's probably just on the make, whereas for Hermione it's a sign of what's wrong with her life) but with their backgrounds and the choices they've made they don't really stand a chance of being together.

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